Saturday, May 5, 2012

Dust It Off Bloghop: Day 2


That's right.

It's Day #2 of this fabulous bloghop hosted by Cortney Pearson and Theresa Paolo. Today we get to showcase a 300-350 word excerpt from a shelved project. It was hard to choose! I have so many favorites from Shadow Watchers:



I stood panting in the rain, my thoughts churning at an alarming rate. It was him. There was no mistaking the distinct lilt that accented his tone. Just the thought about how his voice had rolled against my body instead of inside my head made my cheeks flush with heat.
With a sudden rush, the fog lifted and the sounds of battle diminished. The sudden silence shook me, my heart beat loud in my ears. Mom sat a few feet away, one of the soldiers hunched over her. The shadow army regrouped and I saw who I knew was my savior, either by his air of command or by the graceful way he moved.
The soldiers remained alert, ready to spring at any sign of threat. My rescuer stood apart from the group, his dark head tipped downward as if in thought. He paced for a time, covering the length of the small clearing in a couple of strides. When he paused, he spoke low and quick, an unfamiliar language flying though his lips. The shadow army bowed their heads and disappeared, vanishing like smoke.
I took a breath. And then another.
We were together. Him. Me. After years of hearing his voice in my head and wanting to see him so much I thought I would shatter from the pain it caused, he was here.
The rain had stopped and the moonlight trickled down through the branches, making his silhouette look like an extension of the long shadows under the trees.
I was staring. But so was he. Intensity radiated off of him, mingling with my fascination in the air between us. Time had no meaning. It could have been hours, minutes, or seconds that we faced each other in silence. Then he moved and the connection broke. I felt as if I had been hurled back into my body.
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Thanks, guys! Hope you enjoyed! Now I'm off to go read the other excerpts! 

Red. Head. Out. :D 

22 comments:

  1. That's one striking excerpt. I want more!

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  2. Your book sounds exciting, I'd love to know more!

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  3. Ohh, THAT'S how you write a story! That was just too beautiful for words, Morgan!

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  4. I want to know more about him. That first paragraph had me hooked.

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  5. Woah! this is awesome.."just the thought about how his voice had rolled against my body" meeeow. hehehe. I want to read this story so bad! When can I? Seriously!

    Andrea

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  6. I felt every bit of that! Do not reshelve this!

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  7. After I read the first paragraph I stopped looked up and said, "Holy sh&*! This is amazing. Your writing flows beautifully I didn't want the end to come. You can't shelf this. Or you can but it needs to be on a shelf in a bookstore :)

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  8. Such a tease! I want to know what happens next! (And before, for that matter.) Holy cow, are you talented. Write more, please.

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  9. Excellent. Loved it. I agree with Theresa, this needs to be on a shelf in a bookstore, along with the rest!

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  10. That was awesome! I want to know what happens next. Great setting, mood, and intensity.

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  11. Very intriguing. This really made me want to read more. Well done.

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  12. That was intense! "Just the thought about how his voice had rolled against my body instead of inside my head made my cheeks flush with heat." Yeah, me, too :) I wish I knew even more about what's going on here. Completely intrigued!

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  13. Oooh this makes me miss Shadow Watchers SO BAD!!!! Arggggh!

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  14. It's cute. Love the description. It really sucks me in.

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  15. I loved your descriptions and the language! It makes me want to read more.

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  16. great piece full of anticipation!

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  17. Morgan, I'm serious--this story STILL makes me swoon! Maybe come back to it? Pretty please? :-p

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  18. Definitely felt the connection between them--great job!

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  19. Wow Morgan. Your writing is phenomenal. I felt and envisioned the whole thing with such ease. Really awesome job.

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  20. You big meanie! Why'd you have to stop there?!! Loved it, of course. Way to go, lady!

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  21. Great job Morgan! It certainly makes me want to read more!

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